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Offline Bracesx3

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Re: The Split
« Reply #180 on: 27. November 2023, 04:43:10 AM »
The amount of research you put into your stories is impressive. I always enjoy them.

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Re: The Split
« Reply #181 on: 29. November 2023, 04:32:03 AM »
Episode 89.

The last few weeks had been one of extreme sadness.  Worldwide hostilities had spread.

Russia and Ukraine were still fighting.  Over what no one was sure other than rubble and pride.

Israel was still at war with Hamas.  But things had changed when Iran had detonated a dirty bomb in Tel Aviv.  This had led to an avalanche of horror.

Israel had obliterated Iran.  This had caused Pakistan to fire an errant nuclear warhead, thinking they were being attacked, which had caused India to respond.  India had decimated Pakistan.

Amongst all of this, China had invaded and occupied Taiwan.

Through it all, the United States had not been directly involved in any of it.  But they had been indirectly involved in all of it.

And most people did not understand that one nuclear submarine could destroy Earth.  But, when the Soviet nuclear submarine Kalishnakov was hacked into and ordered to fire their two long range nuclear warheads, they did.  And the U.S. reacted in turn.

Peter was a light sleeper, he had always awoken when the blinds got light.  He did the same tonight.  Out of habit he looked at the alarm clock and saw it was 2:17 am.

He gently nudged Sarah awake and wrapped her in a hug.  Holding her, his mouth beside her ear, he whispered “I have always loved you.  And I always will.”

And then there was….

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Re: The Split
« Reply #182 on: 29. November 2023, 04:41:36 AM »
Okay, this brings me back to the first ten-ish chapters. I’m trying to figure out what the hell this means, and the cliffhanger sucks. But, it is a great story overall. I really enjoy the character development and am looking forward to reading chapter 90.

I can see this going really badly, just by the fact that it is 2:17 and the light outside is bright, especially with what you said.

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Re: The Split
« Reply #183 on: 29. November 2023, 04:54:35 AM »
There is no chapter 90.

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Re: The Split
« Reply #184 on: 29. November 2023, 05:09:28 AM »
There is no chapter 90.

Wow. Pretty damned heavy!

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Re: The Split
« Reply #185 on: 29. November 2023, 05:11:29 AM »
I’ve gotta agree with napacaster on this one. This is not how I envisioned the end to be. It definitely wraps things up well, though. I was gutted to read the ending, I’ve fallen in love with Peter and Sarah and all the rest of the girls.

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« Reply #186 on: 29. November 2023, 05:23:30 AM »
I’ve gotta agree with napacaster on this one. This is not how I envisioned the end to be. It definitely wraps things up well, though. I was gutted to read the ending, I’ve fallen in love with Peter and Sarah and all the rest of the girls.

Me too. It's been a great story.

I help a fellow edit his story after it's translated to English from his native language. We have often discussed how much of the real world to bring into his story and it is a fine line to walk. I take the easy way out and avoid it all together in my writing.

I used to be an avid listener to sports talk radio until it became all political a few years ago. Politics ruins everything!

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Re: The Split
« Reply #187 on: 29. November 2023, 05:57:28 AM »
"Shall we play a game? How about Global Thermonuclear War?"

I didn't read a lick of the story, but that's an original ending!

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Re: The Split
« Reply #188 on: 29. November 2023, 05:59:08 AM »
"Shall we play a game? How about Global Thermonuclear War?"

I didn't read a lick of the story, but that's an original ending!

Hell, it might be the ending for all of us, too!

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Re: The Split
« Reply #189 on: 29. November 2023, 06:00:00 AM »
When the blinds get white at 2 am it is the FBI or thermonuclear war.  Either way your life is over.

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« Reply #190 on: 29. November 2023, 06:04:42 AM »
Hell, it might be the ending for all of us, too!

Yup. Someone bombs someone, then they retaliate, next thing we know it’s a chain of events which essentially destroys the Earth. It’s almost happened once, it could definitely happen again.

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Re: The Split
« Reply #191 on: 29. November 2023, 11:04:04 AM »
I would really like to read more of the characters and how it all continues.. Izzy and her Friend, Izzy working at the Ortho and all the other lovely characters in and around VistaView :)

Chapter 90 isn definitely NOT the way this great story should end!

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« Reply #192 on: 29. November 2023, 18:25:47 PM »
If the story were to continue, I imagine it would be one where the patients are searching for an orthodontist to either continue their treatment or have their braces removed, in a post-nuclear world.